Sare Agama

I really like it, nothing wrong about it as far as I can tell. “You really don’t think I’m a coward?” She shook her head fervently. “No. And you know ...

This is only part of the story, I haven't finished it yet. This is also my first story so please critique as much as needed. Vashoa stared out over the ...

Interesting. I agree with some others, about how everything happens so fast. [quote]I swapped my paws out ferociously getting only fur each time. Instead of swapped, you might want to ...

This is only part of the story, I haven't finished it yet. This is also my first story so please critique as much as needed. Vashoa stared out over the ...

I really like it. I have read the books, and you have done a pretty good job of making it sound like Erin Hunter was writing it. Awesome beginning! 8) ...

Really nice. One of the reasons I really like it is because I have read the books, and the format is very similar. The only critiques are the same as ...

I really love it. I wish I could make something half as good! :mrgreen: Makes me wish I was receiving it. I'm sure whoever gets it will love it. It ...

Wow... Thats about all I can say. I feel like I am in that scene, watching the sun sink into a bed of clouds. The way the sun is slanting ...

I really love your story, even though it has some errors. That's understandable, considering the fact that you only had about 20 minutes to write. Anyway, back to the errors. ...